Baltimore Crime: Inside the mind of child killer Melvin Jones

Wednesday, March 23, 2011

Sean said...: "Inside the case of the sex offender who killed an 11 year-old boy for cheating on him for the BPD homicide detective who worked the case."

What?!? WTF does that mean? Were these words drawn randomly from a hat? Is this a refrigerator magnet poem?; Wed Mar 23, 10:57:00 AM EDT
Stewie del Gato said...: 2nd "for" should be "by".; Wed Mar 23, 02:54:00 PM EDT
Cham said...: Sean, I don't understand that either. I'm totally confused.; Wed Mar 23, 02:55:00 PM EDT
Maurice Bradbury said...: maybe that's what it's like inside the mind of Melvin Jones?; Wed Mar 23, 04:09:00 PM EDT
Sean said...: So...

"Inside the case of the sex offender who killed an 11 year-old boy for cheating on him by the BPD homicide detective who worked the case."

That's only SLIGHTLY better.; Wed Mar 23, 04:40:00 PM EDT
Sean said...: "Inside the case of the sex offender who killed an 11 year-old boy for cheating on him, by the BPD homicide detective who worked the case."

Okay, I see a comma has now been added - that helps somewhat. Um... maybe change the first "case" to "mind," to match the title of the post? Also, that makes the second "case" sound less... redundant.; Wed Mar 23, 04:44:00 PM EDT